tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8970258.post116388233422700340..comments2023-09-11T11:02:49.536+01:00Comments on Pupart - musings on music, literature film and whatever.: The Liberal Use of AdjectivesJuliahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06090382196937582571noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8970258.post-1163905715303967822006-11-19T03:08:00.000+00:002006-11-19T03:08:00.000+00:00I suppose there's a fine line between painting the...I suppose there's a fine line between painting the picture and over-painting it. As I understand it, painters have to know when enough is enough and not add those extra dabs.Anvilcloudhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07974744042579564912noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8970258.post-1163892790957277462006-11-18T23:33:00.000+00:002006-11-18T23:33:00.000+00:00yes I must look at their older stuff and compare. ...yes I must look at their older stuff and compare. I know I shoildn't worry too much at this stage it must be in my nature!<BR/>Thanks for the encouragement!Juliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06090382196937582571noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8970258.post-1163890555688684582006-11-18T22:55:00.000+00:002006-11-18T22:55:00.000+00:00I too struggled with this in the first year - espe...I too struggled with this in the first year - especially with the fiction. I think what I've learned now is that, to use your example, whereas you might have said 'mossy green hillock', you would instead set up the existence of the hillock earlier by getting your character to it, ('she stopped beside a small hillock'), and then say something like 'and leaned against the moss that covered it'. (Sorry, that sounds cr*p but you can hopefully see what I mean!)<BR/><BR/>Or you could try something like, 'the hillock was green with moss'? It still provides the same information but without all the 'y' endings......<BR/><BR/>Hope this helps - don't despair as your work looks really promising.... and it's really early days yet. I'm still telling myself that whenever I despair - but the progress of the third years has been really remarkable when you look at their work now and compare it to the archived stuff from their first year on the bulletin board.theprovocativecynichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08107903326035987724noreply@blogger.com